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四級作文訓(xùn)練(二)
8points In our modern social life,there are many examples around us show many people are cheated.Advertisements cheat people,salesmen cheat people,even one's closest friends cheat him or her.So many heartbreaks are heard everyday that we cannot help asking:where is our honest exist?Everybody is taught honest in the primary school or even in the kindergarten.Honesty does good not only to ourseives,but to others as well.If we are honest to others,we will be happier and be in abetter mood.Otherwise,we'll feel guilt at last.To acompany and its advertisement,honesty will bring it more consumer and more profit.If we cheat others,friends will not believe you and they will leave you alone.To acompany,no consumer will buy your product again!
So,as the above is said,it pays to be honest.Let's create amorally outstanding social.
僅在第一段就有那么多的錯誤和不規(guī)范的表達(dá),其余的就不用說了。好在還能扣題,連貫性也過得去。
5pointsWith the development of modern economic and industry,competitive is becoming more and more obvious.At the same time,the performance of dishonest is becoming more and more clearly.
Nowadays,there are many dishonest performance in our society.For example,some people found that he saled goods had past the preservation date.Not throw them away,the revised the preservation date,and saled them again after several day.Another case in the point,a pair of shoes was made from goat.However,in order to sale at ahigh price,the salers would say they were made from cow which has good quality.
From the foregoing,we can see that dishonest does not only harm to yourselves but also harm to others.And it is no use only realize the harmness of dishonest.We should be honest from now on and be honest on our daily life.It is only that people all over the world are honest then our country will be beautiful and wealthy.
2pointsNow in our society,many people are not honest in doing soming.we often can meet with soming happened cause by people who are not honest.For example,Now we take the bus need carry cents own,and when you upstairs the bus,you should put the cent into the money box.Every people do that,but some of the people put the other things instead the cents.For another example,it is more normal that in the exams we can always find some students see others.
I consider that every people should be honest.As apeople,honest should be first,because it can make us to be increase and make our society develop.In doing everything we should be honest all,study,work,life and so on.If you re honest,every people will be friend to you,and who will regard you good people.But if you don't be honest,people must unwilling to trath with you.So if you are want to be agood people,remember honest first.
二.拿到題目先做什么?
一般分為三個步驟:審題、列提綱、動手寫
審題
一是許多題目只有幾個詞,是文章的高度概括,要搞清楚要求寫什么,就需要仔細(xì)閱讀內(nèi)容提綱甚至求助于指示中其它有關(guān)線索。比如這樣一個題目Advertisement on TV,這個題目很大,雖然所給的提綱:1,present state 2,reasons 3,my comments把題目的范圍縮小了,但還是不能確定reason寫什么。好多考生都寫了人們?yōu)槭裁聪矚g看電視廣告。實(shí)際上根據(jù)指示中your composition should start with the given opening sentence:"Today more and more advertisements are seen on the TV screen",應(yīng)當(dāng)寫廣告為什么會越來越多地出現(xiàn)在電視上。
二是許多學(xué)生缺乏全局觀念,缺乏分析和理解所給的幾條內(nèi)容提綱之間的內(nèi)在聯(lián)系和與題目的關(guān)系的能力,習(xí)慣性地按提綱怎么說就怎么寫。結(jié)果寫出來的文章各段之間沒有聯(lián)系,歪曲了題意。如1994年六級作文考試的題目we need to broaden our knowledge所給的三條提綱是:1)科學(xué)技術(shù)是社會發(fā)展不可缺少的,2)社會科學(xué)和自然科學(xué)互相滲透,3)現(xiàn)代大學(xué)生需要廣博的知識。如果仔細(xì)分析一下就會發(fā)現(xiàn)前兩條是通過闡述自然科學(xué)和社會科學(xué)知識的重要性來說明第三條為什么大學(xué)生需要廣博的知識。但為數(shù)不少的考生根本沒有認(rèn)識到這一點(diǎn)。特別在寫第二條時不是去寫社會科學(xué)知識同樣重要,而是大談社會科學(xué)與自然科學(xué)的相互關(guān)系,喧賓奪主,偏了題。
1995年6月的四級作文題Advantages of aJob Interview.所給的三條提綱是…,很清楚,要求寫的是一片論說文,論述找工作面試的好處。但不少考生對題目和提綱不加分析,貿(mào)然動筆,竟寫了一封應(yīng)聘求職信,還有的寫成一篇面試者和應(yīng)試者的一篇對話。結(jié)果,盡管他們的文章寫得較好,都因文不切題,最后得分都是零分。
再舉一個例子,題目是What Would happen if There Were No Power?要求學(xué)生根據(jù)所給的三個段首句寫:
1,Ever since early this century,electricity has become an essential part of our modern life.
2,If there were no electric power.
3,Therefore,
但閱卷人員發(fā)現(xiàn),竟有不少考生圍繞選舉權(quán)在現(xiàn)代社會中的重要性大做文章。究其原因,考生沒有好好去讀題目和段首句。Power有很多意思:政權(quán)、權(quán)利、能力、動力、力量等。不去推敲要求寫的是什么,又錯把electricity看成election。結(jié)果寫得再好,也得不了分。
列提綱
許多同學(xué)的作文常犯條理不清、內(nèi)容混亂的錯誤,究其原因,多半是沒有編列提綱所致。因此,在認(rèn)真審題之后,就應(yīng)該列提綱,"磨刀不誤砍柴工",它能夠幫助你理清思路,使你的作文層次清楚,主次分明,前后連貫。
提綱既可寫成句子,也可寫成詞組,但是由于時間關(guān)系,最好寫成詞組。我們來看看以"My Best Friend"為題的作文提綱該如何寫。
1,I like one of my friends.
2,A.He possesses profound knowledge.
B.He likes supplying everybody.
C.He is quiet and gentle.
3,My best friend's name is"book".
這帖是繼四級作文訓(xùn)練(一)的 再看一篇My Ideal Job為題的作文提綱:1,Teaching is my ideal job.
2,Why do Ichoose teaching as my job?
Teaching is learning.
Teaching means freedom and independence.
It offers acertain peace of mind.
3,Nothing can change my mind.
三.如何開頭和結(jié)尾
文章一般分為引言introduction,正文body和結(jié)束語conclusion三部分。其中的引言部分和結(jié)束語就形成了文章的引言段和結(jié)尾段,而正文部分就是發(fā)展段,它既可以是一個段落,也可以是幾個段落。
如何開頭
引言段的寫作方法很多,但由于四級作文的時間和篇幅的限制,常用的寫法有以下幾種:
1.對立法:先引出其他人的不同看法,然后提出自己的看法或者偏向于某一看法,
適用于有爭議性的主題.
例如(e.g)
[1].When asked about.,the vast/overwhelming majority of people say that.But Ithink/view abit differently.
[2].When it comes to.,some people believe that.Others argue/claim that the opposite/reverse is true.There is probably some truth in both arguments/statements,but(I tend to the prefer/latter.)
[3].Now,it is commonly/generally/widely believed/held/acknowledged that.They claim/believe/argue that.But Iwonder/doubt whether.
2.現(xiàn)象法引出要剖析的現(xiàn)象或者問題,然后評論.
e.g
[1].Recently the rise in problem of/(phenomenon of).has cause/
aroused public/popular/wide/worldwide concern.
[2].Recently the issue of the problem of/the phenomenon of.
has been brought into focus.(has been brought to public attention)
[3].Inflation/Corruption/Social inequality.is yet another of the new and bitter truth we have to learn to fa ce now/constantly.
3.觀點(diǎn)法--開門見山,直接了當(dāng)?shù)靥岢鲎约簩σ懻摰膯栴}的看法.
e.g:
[1].Never history has the change of.been as evident as.
Nowhere in the world/China has the issue/idea of.been more visible/
popular than.
[2].Now people in growing/significant numbers are beginning/
coming to realize/accept/(be aware)that.
[3].Now there is agrowing awareness/recognition of the necessity to.
Now people become increasingly aware/conscious of the importance of.
[4].Perhaps it is time to have afresh look at the attitude/idea that.
4.引用法---先引出名人名言或者有代表性的看法,來引出文章要展開論述的觀點(diǎn)!
e.g:
[1]."Knowledge is power."such is the remark made by Bacon.This remark has been shared by more and more people.
"Education is not complete with graduation."Such is the opinion of a
great American philosopher.Now more and more people share his opinion.
[2]."."How often we hear such statements/words like theses
/this.
In our own days we are used to hearing such traditional compla
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